I came across an interesting
article recently. It was an online Wall Street Journal contribution by Karen
Thompson Walker, author of newly published and critically acclaimed novel ‘The Age of Miracles’.
In the article, Walker talks
about something that is very insightful for writers. She talks about
‘hardworking sentences’. ‘Hardworking sentences’, according to Walker, do at
least more than one of the following tasks:
1. it delivers crucial information about the background story;
2. it creates
mystery and suspense (in Learning Partners’ parlance, this means it forms a big
fat hook to hook the reader
into the story);
3. it shows
carefully chosen details, as vivid as they are meaningful (in other words, show, and not tell); and
4. it sounds good.
Walker uses an example to
illustrate her point. Consider the following line which is the first line from ‘The Virgin Suicides’, a book by Jeffrey
Eugenides:
On the morning the last Lisbon daughter
took her turn at suicide – it was Mary this time, and sleeping pills, like
Therese – the two paramedics arrived at the house knowing exactly where the
knife drawer was, and the gas oven, and the beam in the basement from which it
was possible to tie a rope.’
How does this sentence fulfil
the four points mentioned above?
1. It delivers
the background story – all the girls in the Lisbon family have committed
suicide – in just one sentence.
2. It creates
mystery and suspense by holding back the reasons for the suicides, which will
of course pique the reader’s curiosity and compel said reader to continue
reading to find out why.
3. The
sentence does not just tell
us that that the Lisbon girls committed suicide. It also shows us how they did so: stabbing themselves/cutting their
wrists, gassing themselves, hanging and of course ingesting poison.
4. There is an
interesting turn of phrase in the sentence – ‘the last Lisbon daughter took her turn at suicide’. This
is an unusual way of saying ‘the last Lisbon daughter committed suicide’ and
its unusualness rings in our ears and captures our attention. It is also a very
witty way of stating that her sisters had committed suicide too.
I thought long and hard about
whether I should write about this article. Why the dilemma?
Because it is not easy to
write such sentences. It takes years of practice and a lot of conscious thought
and deliberation. By the time a person is able to do this, said person would be
an accomplished novelist, comparable to the Stephen Kings and Haruki Murakamis
of the world.
Hence my concern: Is such a
high standard applicable to Singapore’s students?
After some consideration, I’ve
come to the answer ‘yes’. This post is aimed at secondary school pupils or very
advanced Primary 5/6 pupils. And while it may be too much to demand that our
pupils produce works of such outstanding calibre, I believe that if you set the
benchmark high, they can’t fall too low. (And you never know, this post might well plant
the seeds for a future Singaporean Nobel Prize-winner for Literature J.)
We could water down the requirements for Primary 5/6 pupils. In an essay of 300-500 words (I know, I know – in the PSLE, the continuous writing requirement is a minimum of 150 words but seriously, how many children can write 150 words for continuous writing and hope to score an A* for English?), if they could produce two to five such sentences, it’s a valiant effort already. Moreover, their sentences do not have to fulfil all four points. If their sentences can fulfil more than one point, that is good enough.
As for secondary school
pupils, as they are older, we do require that their works be more mature and
sophisticated. Hence, this is a very useful tip for them if they want to make
sure that their writing is a cut above their peers’. If they make an effort to
include such sentences in their writing, this will automatically make their
stories richer and more nuanced. Of course, the results won’t be immediate.
Like any other skill, this is a skill that will take time and practice but if
the pupils diligently and mindfully attempt to do this each time they write,
gradually but certainly, there will be a marked improvement in their written
work.
Lastly, for those who are
interested in reading the original article, click here.
Walker includes a few more examples in the article that help to shed more light
on the subject.
Her new book also seems to be
very interesting. I’m waiting for the National Library to stock it but for the
impatient people who don’t want to wait, you could always get them from Amazon
or the leading bookstores in Singapore.
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