The pictures for today's composition:
This is not a usual theme that we see in school; as such, some pupils may find it quite challenging to write such a story. Nonetheless, I believe that it is beneficial to get the pupils to do this exercise for a couple of reasons:
1. It is good to get them to write some non-examination type stories, to expand their repertoire.
2. It can get boring to write the same type of stories over and over; so writing a story that is not typical of what they usually do spices up the exercise for them.
The story is also pretty straightforward so I won't be doing a picture analysis. Instead, for the first video, I'll zoom straight into the first focus or theme for this week: How to describe hot weather.
Hot Weather
Many pupils like to begin the story by describing the weather. As the weather in Singapore is typically hot, it would be useful to know various ways of describing hot weather.
For example, instead of saying 'It was a hot day.' -- so boring! -- you could say 'It was a sweltering day.' Watch the video to find out other interesting ways of describing hot weather.
Eureka!
In many stories, there would be a point where a character gets an idea and then the story proceeds. Again, it is so dull when you just say 'I had an idea.'
Watch the video to learn 8 different ways to say 'I had an idea.' and spice up your writing.
Sample Story
Friday, 24 October 2014
Saturday, 18 October 2014
PRIMARY 3 & PRIMARY 4 COMPOSITION - LINKING WORDS TO MAKE SENTENCE STRUCTURES MORE INTERESTING
Using the same sentence structure again and again is boring
A common problem amongst beginning writers is they tend to use the same sentence structure throughout their writing, resulting in a monotonous and boring story.
The sentence structure most commonly used is:
Subject + verb + object
This problem is easily resolved by adding some linking words/phrases in front of the sentence. Linking words/phrases are simply words and phrases that link what you want to say in the sentence to the previous sentence.
Using linking words/phrases at the start of your sentence will add some variety to your sentence structure, making your writing more interesting. Not only that, they also help your story to flow more smoothly and make your story clearer to your reader (by showing cause and effect, sequence of events, etc).
Some linking words/phrases that you can add to the front of your sentences:
To
describe an unexpected happening
Ø Suddenly
Ø All
of a ____________________
Ø Out
of the blue
Ø Abruptly
|
To
describe an exact moment
Ø Just
at that moment
Ø Just
at that instant
Ø Just
then
|
Phrases
to show passage of a short period of time
Ø After
a short while
Ø Within
a few minutes/A few minutes later
Ø Not
long later/Soon
Ø In
no time
|
Phrases
to show Immediately
Ø Immediately
Ø Instantly/Instantaneously
Ø Without
further ado
Ø In
the nick of time
|
Phrases
to show passage of time
Ø After
some time
Ø Some
time later
Ø Later
in the…,
Ø Finally
Ø In
the end
Ø At
last
|
Using
Adverbs as Linking Words
Ø Unfortunately/Fortunately
Ø Coincidentally
Ø Quickly
|
Words/Phrases
to show two actions going on at the same time
Ø While
Ø at
the same time
Ø as…
Ø concurrently
|
Using
Emotions as Linking Words
Ø Out
of curiosity
Ø To
my shock
Ø Filled
with delight
|
Words/Phrases
to show cause/Reason
Ø Due
to…
Ø Because…
Ø As
Ø Since…
|
|
Here is the story for this week. Note that linking words/phrases used at the start of the sentence are in pink.
A note about content
This story is a little outdated. I first created it for my pupils in 2008. It was very popular because at that time, Mas Selamat had just escaped from prison and was still at large.
Still I decided to use this outdated story because I want to stress a point. You know the point I keep hammering about writing an original story, a story that is different from what your friends and classmates will write?
A way to do that is to use current affairs in your news. What are the current events that have captured the public's imagination? What comes to mind: the Chinese tour guide and the rich widow, City Harvest trial, etc.
Of course, to be able to do this means that you have to keep abreast of current news, which means that you need to read the newspapers.
So please do so. Not only will you improve your English, who knows, you may be able to use the news that you've read to make your story original and entertaining.
If you want to, you can download this week's assignment and sample story here.
Saturday, 11 October 2014
CALLING OUT TO GRAMMAR NERDS!
I was born in the '70s.
When I attended school (both primary and secondary) in the '80s, the focus on grammar then, I believe (I was a rather 'blur' pupil), was more of incidental learning.
Sure, the teachers taught grammar (if they knew grammar) but they spent more time drilling us on the basic things like subject-noun agreement, present tense and past tense. Nothing too fancy. Anything more advanced than subject-noun agreement or tenses were only mentioned in passing. Those who understood, good and well for them. Those who didn't -- well, it was no big deal as we were supposed to learn grammar incidentally.
I was one of those who didn't get grammar. But I was fortunate in that I was really into reading, and that helped me a lot during my examinations.
Then I became a teacher and I realised that some knowledge of grammar is necessary if I want to be able to explain to my pupils clearly and simply why certain sentence structures are acceptable and others aren't. And thus began my interest in English grammar.
After some time, I realise I'm not alone. That there are a sizeable number of people out there who are interested in this topic too. Call them grammar nazis, grammar nerds, whatever; it's good to know that I'm not alone. (It's always good to know that having a particular interest, even if it's grammar, does not make one weird.)
To my fellow grammar nerds, I came across this article on Huffington Post about a trick to analyse one's sentence structure. It gets a little complex, especially towards the end, but the overarching principle is general enough to apply to primary school English.
Click this link to read the article: http://www.huffingtonpost.com/2014/10/01/diagram-sentence-grammar_n_5908462.html.
I hope you find it as illuminating and interesting as I do. :)
When I attended school (both primary and secondary) in the '80s, the focus on grammar then, I believe (I was a rather 'blur' pupil), was more of incidental learning.
Sure, the teachers taught grammar (if they knew grammar) but they spent more time drilling us on the basic things like subject-noun agreement, present tense and past tense. Nothing too fancy. Anything more advanced than subject-noun agreement or tenses were only mentioned in passing. Those who understood, good and well for them. Those who didn't -- well, it was no big deal as we were supposed to learn grammar incidentally.
I was one of those who didn't get grammar. But I was fortunate in that I was really into reading, and that helped me a lot during my examinations.
Then I became a teacher and I realised that some knowledge of grammar is necessary if I want to be able to explain to my pupils clearly and simply why certain sentence structures are acceptable and others aren't. And thus began my interest in English grammar.
After some time, I realise I'm not alone. That there are a sizeable number of people out there who are interested in this topic too. Call them grammar nazis, grammar nerds, whatever; it's good to know that I'm not alone. (It's always good to know that having a particular interest, even if it's grammar, does not make one weird.)
To my fellow grammar nerds, I came across this article on Huffington Post about a trick to analyse one's sentence structure. It gets a little complex, especially towards the end, but the overarching principle is general enough to apply to primary school English.
Click this link to read the article: http://www.huffingtonpost.com/2014/10/01/diagram-sentence-grammar_n_5908462.html.
I hope you find it as illuminating and interesting as I do. :)
Friday, 10 October 2014
PRIMARY 3 & PRIMARY 4 COMPOSITION - FOOD POISONING
This week's story is a picture-based story about food poisoning.
Video 1 - Picture Analysis
The pictures are ordered in the correct sequence (unlike the new format) but it's not a big issue because most pupils have no problems arranging the pictures in the new format.
Video 2 - Vocabulary of a Trip to the Clinic
The theme for this week is the vocabulary associated with a visit to the doctor's. This vocabulary will come in handy when you have to write a story about:
Video 1 - Picture Analysis
The pictures are ordered in the correct sequence (unlike the new format) but it's not a big issue because most pupils have no problems arranging the pictures in the new format.
Video 2 - Vocabulary of a Trip to the Clinic
The theme for this week is the vocabulary associated with a visit to the doctor's. This vocabulary will come in handy when you have to write a story about:
- falling ill after being drenched in the rain
- having a tummy ache after overeating
- breaking a bone from a fall; and numerous other possibilities in which a character in the story has to see the doctor.
Video 3 - Sample Story
The assignment for the composition can be downloaded from the link provided below.
Resources
Monday, 6 October 2014
P3/4 COMPOSITION: FIRE
A reason why many compositions do not score well is because the writing lacks the details that make a story realistic. And the pupils really cannot be blamed for that. Vocabulary needs to be acquired. If pupils are not exposed to the vocabulary of a fire, how can they write a vivid story about it?
What I'll do is upload the worksheet first. So anyone who is interested can attempt the exercise and then check this blog later for the answers.
This is why in many writing classes in various schools and tuition centres today, you see vocabulary lists being given out in composition classes. Some parents don't like it, thinking that the children are being spoon-fed, and leads to uniform essays devoid of creativity and originality. The charge is valid, but given the classroom conditions of current schools and most tuition centres, this is the most efficient for pupils to acquire the vocabulary they need to produce a decent essay.
Another way to do it? Read. This is a more natural way, but more time-consuming, especially at the start, and it's not favoured by many pupils who already have homework and distractions clamouring for their time. Which is a pity. Because honestly, that's the best way, and the rewards reaped as time progresses are immeasurable. Know why some kids can score A* in English even if they don't have English tuition? Yes, it's because they read. A lot. And widely.
Another thing about reading: try to read beyond storybooks. Storybooks are a must (because the main writing pupils are tested on in primary school is storywriting aka narrative writing), but it is also beneficial to read a wider genre like magazines and newspapers articles.
The latter is an especially good source for petty crime (think snatch theft, robbery, burglary) and accidents (fires, drownings, road accidents) which are common themes in primary school compositions.
Today's composition will be based on a fire. The lesson will first require the pupil to read a newspaper article adaptation and then to identify the phrases/words that are used to describe the fire. After that, in the classroom, I would then go through the vocabulary with them to see how many words/phrases they have correctly identified.
This is not a normal classroom, so I'll put up a YouTube Video instead. Problem is I've no proper Internet access to upload a huge file like a video so the video would have to go up a couple of days later. Please excuse the inconvenience. The videos are ready.
Here is the worksheet. Read the article first. Then highlight or underline any words/phrases that describe a fire. Copy them into the box given below the article. Then check Video 1 below to see if you managed to identify all the words/phrases.
Video 1 - Words/Phrases Used to Describe a Fire in a Newspaper Article
Note: In the worksheet used for Video 1, there are some typos. The paragraph in red is the original paragraph seen in the video. Amendments are in green.
Evidently, the fire had broken out shortly before at the Balestier area. Another witness who saw the firebroke break quickly raised the alarm and alerted the other residents. At 1.09am, the SCDF received a call informing them that a unit is on fire at the above-mentioned location. The SCDF responded quickly; the fire engine arrived on the scene within 6 minutes.
In an earlier post, I went through 9 techniques to begin a story. One of the techniques is describing the setting (place, time of day, weather). And the tactic to use then is the five senses. Likewise for describing a fire. To make the fire vivid and realistic, using the five senses helps. So the pupil is encouraged to go through the five senses and see how he or she will use them to describe the fire.
I omitted the sense of taste because the other four senses give enough detail. And I usually recommend giving only two-three instances of descriptions, which means you don't even use all four senses below. But if you insist, taste is also possible. Hint: If you inhale enough smoke, there will be a taste in your mouth. How to describe that?
Again, because I don't have access to a fast enough Internet connection, I can only put up the answers later when I can access the Internet. So please be patient.
See Video 2.
Video 2 - Using the Senses to Describe a Fire
Now the pupil will have the vocabulary from the newspaper article and the Senses exercise. Combine that with the PEA of Fear, he can proceed to write the story. The assignment is that the pupil should imagine himself as a resident of the block that caught fire, and he was at home watching television when the power went off. He should continue the story from here. (Hint: narrator's identity is not fixed [i.e. 'I' can be a Primary 3 or 4 pupil or a doddering old man or even a pregnant woman].)
The video for the sample storywill also have to be uploaded later. has been uploaded below.
Video 3 - Sample Story
Assignment
PDF format is available by clicking on this link.
Video 1 - Words/Phrases Used to Describe a Fire in a Newspaper Article
Note: In the worksheet used for Video 1, there are some typos. The paragraph in red is the original paragraph seen in the video. Amendments are in green.
Evidently, the fire had broken out shortly before at the Balestier area. Another witness who saw the fire
In an earlier post, I went through 9 techniques to begin a story. One of the techniques is describing the setting (place, time of day, weather). And the tactic to use then is the five senses. Likewise for describing a fire. To make the fire vivid and realistic, using the five senses helps. So the pupil is encouraged to go through the five senses and see how he or she will use them to describe the fire.
I omitted the sense of taste because the other four senses give enough detail. And I usually recommend giving only two-three instances of descriptions, which means you don't even use all four senses below. But if you insist, taste is also possible. Hint: If you inhale enough smoke, there will be a taste in your mouth. How to describe that?
Video 2 - Using the Senses to Describe a Fire
Now the pupil will have the vocabulary from the newspaper article and the Senses exercise. Combine that with the PEA of Fear, he can proceed to write the story. The assignment is that the pupil should imagine himself as a resident of the block that caught fire, and he was at home watching television when the power went off. He should continue the story from here. (Hint: narrator's identity is not fixed [i.e. 'I' can be a Primary 3 or 4 pupil or a doddering old man or even a pregnant woman].)
The video for the sample story
Video 3 - Sample Story
Assignment
PDF format is available by clicking on this link.
Friday, 3 October 2014
DIFFERENCES BETWEEN NEW SYLLABUS AND OLD SYLLABUS COMPOSITIONS (PAPER 1)
The one composition a week will be postponed to the weekend or Monday. In this blog, let's go through the differences between the old and new syllabuses for English composition.
This is not my first time posting a Primary 3 & 4 composition on this blog (see here and here amongst others), but I've not talked about the examination format for Primary 3 & 4 compositions before.
Generally, for Primary 3 & 4 Paper 1 (composition paper), the pupil will have two choices: a picture-based question and a scenario-based one.
There was a change in the English syllabus a few years back.
Before the change, the picture-based question would be a series of three (plus one question mark) or four pictures that form a clearly related sequence of events. See examples below.
Example 1
As can be seen from the pictures, the four pictures are clearly linked and are in sequential order, depicting a bicycle accident in the park.
Example 2
In Example 2, the pictures are also arranged in order and illustrate clearly a story of a car accident.
The difference between Example 1 and Example 2 is in the last picture. In Example 1, the last picture is given but the last picture in Example 2 has been replaced by a question mark.
This makes Example 2 more challenging, but also more interesting, as the pupil has to come up with the end himself. Will the boys be hit? If yes, how seriously would they be injured? Or perhaps they would have a narrow escape? And if they did, how did it happen?
Some schools test four-picture questions in both Primary 3 & 4 examinations; some test only three-picture questions; and others give four-picture questions to Primary 3 students and four-picture ones to Primary 4 students.
The differences between the new and old syllabuses
1. The new format is that only three pictures will be given, and there won't be any question mark.
2. The three pictures are also not in order. But they are clearly linked because if you want to, you can arrange them to form a story without problem.
3. Previously, the pupil has no choice. He has to use all the three or four pictures that are given. Now, he can choose to use any one, two or all of the pictures given. This actually gives a lot more leeway to the pupil in terms of creative freedom.
Final note
Not all schools have adopted the new syllabus for Primary 3 & 4 Paper 1. In fact, many of them are still sticking to the old syllabus and will only begin to expose their pupils to the syllabus in Primary 5 & 6. And yes, the new syllabus is also the new PSLE format.
But parents and pupils don't have to worry too much for even though the format of the question has changed, the end product is still the same; the examiner will be looking out for:
Edit:
This is not my first time posting a Primary 3 & 4 composition on this blog (see here and here amongst others), but I've not talked about the examination format for Primary 3 & 4 compositions before.
Generally, for Primary 3 & 4 Paper 1 (composition paper), the pupil will have two choices: a picture-based question and a scenario-based one.
There was a change in the English syllabus a few years back.
Before the change, the picture-based question would be a series of three (plus one question mark) or four pictures that form a clearly related sequence of events. See examples below.
Example 1
As can be seen from the pictures, the four pictures are clearly linked and are in sequential order, depicting a bicycle accident in the park.
Example 2
In Example 2, the pictures are also arranged in order and illustrate clearly a story of a car accident.
The difference between Example 1 and Example 2 is in the last picture. In Example 1, the last picture is given but the last picture in Example 2 has been replaced by a question mark.
This makes Example 2 more challenging, but also more interesting, as the pupil has to come up with the end himself. Will the boys be hit? If yes, how seriously would they be injured? Or perhaps they would have a narrow escape? And if they did, how did it happen?
Some schools test four-picture questions in both Primary 3 & 4 examinations; some test only three-picture questions; and others give four-picture questions to Primary 3 students and four-picture ones to Primary 4 students.
The differences between the new and old syllabuses
New syllabus picture composition |
1. The new format is that only three pictures will be given, and there won't be any question mark.
2. The three pictures are also not in order. But they are clearly linked because if you want to, you can arrange them to form a story without problem.
3. Previously, the pupil has no choice. He has to use all the three or four pictures that are given. Now, he can choose to use any one, two or all of the pictures given. This actually gives a lot more leeway to the pupil in terms of creative freedom.
Final note
Not all schools have adopted the new syllabus for Primary 3 & 4 Paper 1. In fact, many of them are still sticking to the old syllabus and will only begin to expose their pupils to the syllabus in Primary 5 & 6. And yes, the new syllabus is also the new PSLE format.
But parents and pupils don't have to worry too much for even though the format of the question has changed, the end product is still the same; the examiner will be looking out for:
- a well-developed storyline
- vivid characterisation
- the use of literary techniques (if any)
- sound grammar
- wide range of vocabulary that is effectively used
- how interesting and creative your story is.
If anything, the new format makes it easier for the pupil. Pupils who have problems coming with plots can just link up the three pictures and give their own conclusion. Pupils who are very creative can choose to use just one or two pictures and fill in the missing gaps using their own ideas. It's a win-win situation for all, isn't it?
Edit:
- There is no change to the scenario-based question. As before, a starting scenario is given and then the pupil is asked to continue the story.
- Marking rubric is unchanged for both picture- and scenario-based writing. 120 words minimum. 20 marks (12 marks content and 8 marks language).
Thursday, 2 October 2014
PSLE COMPOSITION FAQ
Below
is a list of common questions that many pupils have about the dos and don’ts of composition-writing in
the examinations.
1.
Can I use numerical figures during composition-writing?
You
can and should use numerical figures for:
•
dates (including years)
•
addresses
•
telephone numbers
•
car-plate numbers
•
serial numbers (of police
officers, prisoners, etc.)
2.
Should words like ‘mother’,
‘father’, ‘grandfather’, ‘grandmother’ start with a capital letter?
It
depends. If it is used as a form of address, yes. If it is used as a generic
term, no.
Another
way to put it is if you have a pronoun in front of it, it should not begin with
a capital letter.
Example:
My grandmother is eighty years old this year. (The pronoun ‘my’ is in front of the word ‘grandmother’, which is being used as a
generic term, so it does not begin with a capital letter.)
If
there is no pronoun in front of the word, then it should begin with a capital
letter.
Example:
Janice shout, ‘Mummy, Mummy, where are you?’ (There is no pronoun in front
of ‘Mummy’, it
is being used as a form of address, so it begins with a capital letter.)
3.
Can I used the ellipsis (‘…’)
to end the story?
You
can. But you need to make sure that the story is properly concluded, i.e. the
problem/conflict has been resolved and all consequences arising from it
addressed.
Another
point to note: don’t
overuse the ellipsis. As a rule-of-thumb, don’t use it more than twice for
one PSLE composition (this does not include the use of ellipses in speech to
denote stuttering or trailing off).
4.
Should I use bombastic words to impress the examiner?
This
is a loaded question.
Using
bombastic words blindly to impress the examiner is a no-no. Having a long and
impressive-looking word in every sentence, or even every alternate sentence is
overkill.
That
said, vocabulary does play a critical role in marks awarded for language, so
you have to show the examiner you know enough words.
How
to achieve this?
•
If the word is being used
aptly, go for it.
•
Some people think that
impressive vocabulary has to be long and unusual (think ‘loquacious’) but it actually also refers
to figures of speech, idioms, and phrasal verbs (e.g. Instead of saying ‘sleep’,
you can say ‘turn in’).
•
You can also use short words
that are uncommon (‘merely’ instead
of ‘only’, ‘utterly’ instead of ‘very’, ‘rue’ instead of ‘regret’).
5.
How much dialogue is suitable?
The
rule of thumb here is no more than 3 instances of dialogue on each written
page. This is a very rough guide. It honestly depends on how effective the
dialogue is. But note that it cannot be the case that the whole story is made
up of dialogue. This section is called Continuous Writing, not Scriptwriting.
6.
What sort of storyline should I avoid?
•
No fantasy (talking animals,
elves & fairies, witches and spells)
•
No science fiction
•
No supernatural story
•
No ending the story with a
dream
•
Romance? Several students have
expressed an interest in this topic; personally I’m okay with having a tinge of
it but it shouldn’t be the main storyline.
•
Avoid topics that you are
unfamiliar with and feel uncomfortable tackling (rape/molestation, murder,
etc.) because unless you have a very vivid imagination, the story will come out
fake and unconvincing. You may even get some facts wrong.
For
a more detailed discussion on what topics are acceptable and which ones should
be avoided, click here.
7.
How long should my composition be?
For
examination requirements, a minimum word count is usually given. So many pupils
wonder if adhering to the minimum word count is good enough.
Most
of the time, it is not. I don’t want to encourage writing long compositions for
the sake of long compositions, but the truth is that to have a fully developed
story that is interesting, the word count usually has to be significantly
greater than the minimum requirement.
Excellent
writing that is short and to the point is a skill that only the most
accomplished writers have managed to achieve. Many pupils will not have
mastered this skill at the age of twelve. Case in point: in my more than 10
years of teaching, I’ve only awarded a high-30 score to a composition that is
within reasonable range of the minimum word count (if I remember correctly, it
was about 180-200 words for a P6 pupil).
Below
is a list of word count requirements for primary school. The ideal requirement
is in purple.
•
Primary 1 and 2 : 80 words
(this is not a hard and fast rule as schools have some discretion and some
schools ask for a lower minimum word count of 60 for P1 pupils) / 120-150
•
Primary 3 and 4 : 120 words / 200-300
•
Primary 6 and 6 : 150 words / 450-500
These
numbers are not cast in stone. They are just to give you a general sense of how
much you should write in order to have a decent plot and enough detail to make
your story stand out.
8.Will
I be penalised if I use American spelling?
The
PSLE used to only accept British spelling but in recent years, American
spelling is also acceptable but you must be consistent; that
means if you use ‘color’ in your composition, use ‘color’ throughout the whole
composition. Likewise if you choose to use ‘colour’.
9.
Can I use swear words like ‘fxxx’ and ‘shxx’ in my story if I’m writing about a
gangster and I want to show his speech realistically?
NO!
A most emphatic no! No expletives in your story at all, please. This will be
frowned upon by the examiner and is unlikely to garner you more marks for
realism.
What
some students do to get around this issue is to use symbols of the kind you see
in comics and manga, and in writing whereby the writer doesn’t want to spell
out the strong language for one reason or another.
E.g.:
Ah Huat stepped up to me menacingly, ‘You want to die, is it, you little
piece of s@#^!’
But
it is my sincere belief that even without profanities, you can create a
realistic and interesting story.
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